Wednesday, July 10, 2013

#PitchMAS in July Entry 32

Title: The Princess Who Was Not
Category/Genre: MG/Fantasy
Word Count: 45,000

Pitch: Raised as the princess, Lilia's really a Flyer. Now war is imminent and the real princess needs her help on a deadly quest for a miracle.

1 comment:

  1. My confusion with this pitch was there's no definition of 'Flyer'. Then the ending is fairly generic - lots of stories about quests to save the world. What makes yours unique? What happens if they don't get the miracle? Show a little more of the stakes. I know, not a lot of words to play with, but you'll get more nibbles when you show why your story is different than the rest out there.
    Hope this helps for the next contest!