My confusion with this pitch was there's no definition of 'Flyer'. Then the ending is fairly generic - lots of stories about quests to save the world. What makes yours unique? What happens if they don't get the miracle? Show a little more of the stakes. I know, not a lot of words to play with, but you'll get more nibbles when you show why your story is different than the rest out there.Hope this helps for the next contest!