My confusion with this pitch was there's no definition of 'Flyer'. Then the ending is fairly generic - lots of stories about quests to save the world. What makes yours unique? What happens if they don't get the miracle? Show a little more of the stakes. I know, not a lot of words to play with, but you'll get more nibbles when you show why your story is different than the rest out there. Hope this helps for the next contest!
My confusion with this pitch was there's no definition of 'Flyer'. Then the ending is fairly generic - lots of stories about quests to save the world. What makes yours unique? What happens if they don't get the miracle? Show a little more of the stakes. I know, not a lot of words to play with, but you'll get more nibbles when you show why your story is different than the rest out there.
ReplyDeleteHope this helps for the next contest!