Title: ISA
Category/Genre: YA Sci-Fi/Psych Thriller
Word Count: 70,000
Pitch: Human/wolf hybrid Isa's companions: Her part-shark best friend, a pissy half-hawk, and a human/deer boy she may accidentally eat due to her growing insanity. Their goal: Discover the birthplace of the hybrids – and destroy it.
I think this could be interesting, but your pitch was one of those where you've included so much unneeded information I passed worried that the entire manuscript might have the same problem. You really don't need to list all those people: "Human/wolf Isa and her hybrid companions' goal is to...." works just as well. We'll find out later who all the companions are, for this you need to highlight the big plot points. They're there, just buried. Hope you rework this and take part in other pitch events!
ReplyDelete